Were you Matisse
you'd paint skinny girls and politicians
in the curtained wings
of my one-woman show,
your palette knife suggesting
more than two dimensions.
My skin
would be subtle hues
of fire and sadness in flat strokes,
the layers of a girl who whispers prayers to the Southern Cross
from the foot of her godless bed.
Despite this
you believe in my
tired-eyed trickle
lingering over the sink
pink rubber gloved at the height of the party;
you'd paint shadows beneath my eyes,
blue stains of hesitation
glimpsed through your third eye, or mine, or something you see
when I look away.







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I read this poem as trying to see if anyone on the outside of your skin can see anything on the inside.
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Artists are magical helpers. Evoking symbols and motifs that connect us to our deeper selves, they can help us along the heroic journey of our own lives.
Joseph Campbell
would be subtle hues
of fire and sadness in flat strokes,
the layers of a girl who whispers prayers to the Southern Cross
from the foot of her godless bed."
I couldn't help but think of Race when you wrote this poem. About hate and tolerance in a sarcastic and yet deep tone of voice. Perhaps it's just me. But, as you said, it's unfinished. I really like this stanza.
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What I don't know will never hurt me, cannot forget cannot remember, this information is forever... missing time -MDMFK
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Of course I'm out of my mind. It's dark and scary in there.
From word one your voice is strong and consistent, with the kind of confidence I think of when I think of your best work.
You really weave the story confidently, images and ideas blending well into one another. Great images too. "blue stains of hesitation" is my favorite, but "tired eyed trickle" and "fire and sadness" are fantastic too.
Only in the final two lines does the voice falter. I really think glimpsed through your third eye, or mine, or something you see
when I look away. should become glimpsed through your third eye,
something you see when I look away.. There's less ambiguity, and the certainty matches pace with the rest of the poem.
A.
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Your images are strong and painted. *smiles* I have this ridiculous image of Bob Ross in my mind, but that's just me thinking of painters, and not because of the poem. (Also, I love Bob Ross, may he rest in peace.)
I love the fire and sadness in flat strokes. I think of Matisse paintings, and of your paintings, too.
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